Chapter 27: Victoria
Thursday 25th September
Victoria was lonely. It was a week since she’d arrived and she hadn’t made any friends yet. She sensed most of the women resented her. Probably because she was Seth’s favourite, she told herself, pushing away the memory of two days ago.
She hadn’t seen him to speak to since then.
She thought it would be so different being in a commune; that she’d belong; be accepted for herself. Not as Richard’s stroppy sister, or her parents’ difficult daughter, which she knew was how they thought of her, but as one of the community here; as Seth’s girlfriend. It wasn’t turning out like that; not yet anyway. Two of the girls in the dorm had already complained about the amount of time she spent on herself instead of her taking on a share of the work. Well, stuff them, they could get lost. She had no intention of looking as grungy as they did. Any more than she was going to learn how to do the stupid knitting Jasmine had insisted she tried. She reckoned if she kept on dropping stitches Jasmine would give up on her. As for using that makeshift cooking range… Victoria shut out the humiliating scene. That woman, Chrystal, hadn’t needed to be so nasty, how was she to know she was supposed to check there was enough wood to keep the fire going underneath? Wasn’t that a job for the men? The tears came easily.
She breathed on the window and rubbed a circle in the grime on the glass with her finger. Peering out, she shivered. She hated it here.
She hated the rusted fence, just yards from the building she was in, and beyond it the expanse of wasteland. Hated the ugly skeletons of old buildings, mapped out on the ground by foundation stones, covered in pink weeds and coarse grass. Hated the spindly-looking shrubs growing from the collapsed ruins of the old mill. She especially hated the large corroded metal sheets that had replaced a part of an old fence, blocking off any view of the road beyond. By twisting her head she could just about see the large gates, padlocked together and leaning lopsidedly against two brick pillars. Like a bloody prison, she thought.
The excitement she’d felt last Wednesday as they drove away from the boring little village in Wales had gone. She’d replaced one stifling place for another.
If only they hadn’t walked by the canal that day.
She flopped down on her mattress and looked down the long room that was allocated to the single women in the commune. There was no one else around but they’d left their smells behind. She crinkled her nose against the smell…no, the stench, she thought the stench of sweat, of unwashed hair. Body odours. She pulled at the thin, horrid sheet of material that divided her mattress from the next. It didn’t reach far enough for her; she’d have liked to shut everybody out completely. The ‘so called’ curtains separating the twelve narrow mattresses weren’t enough to give Victoria the privacy she’d been used to. But they were enough to make her feel cut off from the other girls when they chatted at night.
That was how she knew that Seth held the daily meditations that she hadn’t been allowed to go yet. All he’d said on the second day she was in the commune was, ‘I’ll know when you’re ready to join in.’
She listened to their discussions, jealous of their time spent with him, envious whenever one of them had been singled out for group contemplation. Wanting to feel part of what they shared. To learn how to find that spiritual peace she’d been unable to find. That Seth had promised her that day, way back in the summer.
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Judith, thank you once again for taking part in our extended #ExcerptWeek. Lovely excerpts all, and this one is no exception. I know I’m going to thoroughly enjoy your books, as soon as I can get to them. (Which I hope won’t be too much longer!) I’ve sent this out into the world now, and hope you gain some new readers and followers as a result. And please know how much I appreciate your taking part! ❤
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Marcia, the pleasure is all mine. I bless the day Rosie #RBRT recommended you as an author and a generous sharer of other author’s work. (Not sure that the last bit is grammatically correct! Hmm) Anyway, just to say so many thanks for this. Jx ❤
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Oh noooo!! The apostrophe is in the wrong place. Back to class, Barrow … it’s AUTHORS’, not AUTHOR’S!!! hanging head in shame.
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And of course, you KNOW you are going to be tested on your grammar and punctuation every time you post here, right? WRITTEN exams. (Neatness counts!!) 😀 😀 😀
Okay, I’m totally making that up, because the fact that you are taking the time to comment on this blog means SO much more than whether you had extra time to go back and proof what you said. Or if you’re like me, you’re vision is so impaired, you don’t see half of your typos, anyway.
WE ARE NOT KEEPING SCORE, I promise! We are having fun, and learning from each other, and sharing good things! ❤ ❤ ❤
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Thank you, Marcia, I suppose,as a tutor of creative writing.. and an author, I am mortified when I get it wrong. LOL. You are so understanding… but am in my pyjamas with a dunes hat on. ❤ <3<3 Hmmm …. David, husband looks rather amused… 🙂
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That is very sweet, Judith! But I have to say, I’m the one who should feel blessed (and I do!) for all the wonderful writers and readers who have followed this blog, and enrich my life every day of the week. Even when it’s not #ExcerptWeek. You guys are ALL wonderful, and those of you who share regularly (you know who you are), are just the best folks, EVER!\
Judith, you’ve been a supportive part of this group since the day you joined, and I hope to see you here for many years to come! 🙂 ❤
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Marcia, I’m going nowhere. I love being part of this ‘family’ of authors. Lovely people whom support one another. We may never ‘meet’ in the ‘real’ world but the encouragement we give to each other is invaluable. Love to all. Jx
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You never know, Judith. I’ve met MANY of my online friends in the past, and who knows? Maybe one day I’ll get to come to your part of the world. I’ve always wanted to, and it COULD happen! I’ve already got Deborah Jay talked into to taking me to see MEN IN KILTS when I get to Scotland. I don’t think I should have to shuffle off this mortal coil without that experience. In the Highlands. Near standing stones. And men. In kilts. 😀 😀 😀 Don’t see why I can’t meet a few other friends whilst I’m over there. (You see what I did there? I’m being bi-lingual! Hahahahaha.)
In the meantime, glad you plan to stick around! ❤
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Bore da, (good morning)Marcia 🙂 One of the few Welsh phrases I know (unlike the grandchildren who are all fluent). I thought I should demonstrate a bit of bi-lingual-ism whilst I’m here. LOL. Can’t offer men in kilts in Wales.. but we do have brilliant male choirs (especially in Tenby). And glorious scenery. And the smallest city in Great Britain – St David’s, with a very impressive cathedral. Oh, and lots of sheep.. Writing day today. Yay!!! Jx
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Oh, I’d LOVE to visit Wales! Though I can’t understand how anyone could ever learn to speak the language! It looks very, very complicated to me. But then, I speak Southernese, something most Americans find completely impossible to understand, much less speak. 😀
I’ve seen pictures of Wales, AND, I’ve read some legends that I LOVE. And don’t you have some fantastic walking trails along the cliffs, etc, or is that Cornwall? Probably both! Over the years, I’ve read so many wonderful things, I’ve gotten some of the locations mixed up, I’m sure. But that’s okay, because I want to see them all. Even the ones without men in kilts. (Though maybe I could carry along a PICTURE of a man in a kilt, just to keep me inspired????)
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I’ve actually tried six times over the years to learn Welsh, Marcia. the trouble is you’re expected to be able to write it as well and so many words change when they are in conjunction with others. Then there’s the problem of ‘correct’ Welsh learned and the Welsh that people speak in one part of the country is different from.another (even twenty miles away!) Not just accents – the words/phrases themselves. And, talking of accents, even though I’ve lived here almost forty years, I haven’t lost my Yorkshire accent (Northern England). So, getting my tongue around all the language has proved impossible. Someone once said to me that if you have a cold it’s easier to speak Welsh!! Which actually makes sense as it’s very ‘throaty’ with lots of spitty sounds. I think I’ll stop there just in case I’m insulting someone. But, as I’ve said before, I love living here and yes, the Pembrokeshire Coastal Path is magnificent (more so when walking with a man in a kilt – though he’ll look even better if he has good strong legs) Oh, and Cornwall is equally beautiful. Jx
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And I forgot to say bore da back! 😀
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Reblogged this on Bookin' It and commented:
Have received so many wonderful excerpts on The Write Stuff, over the last two weeks. I hope to share more of them with you guys here in the days ahead! Enjoy!
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There have been some brilliant excerpts, Marci. It’s a fabulous idea.Jx
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I think it’s gone extremely well this time around, too. People are less timid about sharing their own excerpts, and have been very generous with passing things along, as well. I just love doing it every so often, especially when things are slower than normal. So glad you took part!
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You create awesome visuals with words, congratulations!
A book I added to my staggering TBR list.
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Carmen, thank you so much. What a compliment!! Do hope you enjoy the trilogy when they rise to the top. They are very patient. LOLJx
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Loved this series 🙂
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Generous as always, Cathy. Thank you.Jx
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Just truthful x
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Thank you. Jx
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Fabulous to see Judith here today. This book is getting ever so close now to the top of my kindle, one or two to go Judith! 🙂 xo
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Oh, thank you, Debby. Exciting!! Have you read the first one of the trilogy? Jx 🙂 ❤
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Oops, I meant the first one Judith. Incidentally, I have all 3! I’ll be diving in to yours within the next two books I start, yours and Mary Smith’s 🙂 And you’ll know when I do because of course I’ll review. 🙂 xo
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Now I feel cheeky, having asked, Debby. Reading it, it sounds like i was touting to sell more books!! Wondering how to do an apologetic face now. Sitting here waiting for daughter to come home after the Long Course (two & a half miles swimming/one hundred and twelve miles cycling/ and a marathon running) Makes me feel tired just writing it! 🙂 ❤
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Lol, no worries Judith. I told you awhile back I was eager to read the trilogy. It’s sometimes hard to keep track of who’s reading what 🙂 ❤
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Thank you. ❤
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With many thanks to the generous and lovely Marcia Meara; an excellent writer herself: http://amzn.to/29F3G72
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Thank you so much. That is so appreciated, Gerald. 🙂
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What a great set up for a character – looks like Victoria has a lot to learn about life! And the description brings the commune alive in no uncertain terms.
Great excerpt, Judith.
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Thank you so much, Deborah. Always wonder how Victoria will turn out as she gets older.jx
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I enjoyed reading this excerpt which brought back memories of the book. I think I might re-read the tirlogy while I’m waiting for the prequel to come out!
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I’m writing, Mary, I’m writing!! And thank you for your kind comments jx
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I must catch up with all of Judith’s books. Thanks so much!
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Thank you, Olga. You’re feedback would be invaluable. No pressure there then!!! Sorry.Catch up soon at Christoph’s book fair? Jxx
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I have read all of Judith Barrow’s books and reviewed them.. If you would like an example of why I enjoyed them.. here is an excerpt from Living in the Shadows…over on Marcia Meara
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Thanks for sharing Judith’s excerpt, Sally. Hope you’ve been enjoying #ExcerptWeek, here on The Write Stuff. We’ve been having a lot of fun with it.
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Pleasure Marcia.. a great way to promote books..
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Thanks, Sally. Each time I’ve done an #ExcerptWeek, it has gotten bigger, with more folks taking part, so I hope it’s working well for everyone. Hey, it’s free, and it can’t hurt, right? And with luck, the excerpts will get shared far and wide, and more sharing means more exposure. Plus it’s fun! 🙂
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Just in case I miss whilst I am off and online in the next few weeks with the building work, please tag me on @sgc58 and happy to retweet xx
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Sally, those are a such supportive comments. And thank you so much for the re-blog. Hope your lovely house becomes a lovely home. Jx
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Thanks Judith.. little by little – getting the fundamentals in first.. waiting on a new boiler and since it is like November at the moment, not a minute too soon.. xx
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Isn’t it cold!! We have visitors in the holiday apartment. First time we’ve put the heating on in July for them. At least today it’s not raining. Our youngest daughter did the Long Course this weekend (swimming/cycling/running)in wind and rain.Jx
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No danger of overheating then!! Good for her.. getting in training for the decorating.. xx
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Sounds intriguing. I’ll have to look it up. Thanks––and thanks to Marcia for Excerpt Week(s).
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I”ll second the thank you to Marcia. her site is a great platform.. And thank you for our interest in my books. 🙂
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Great excerpt, Judith. I particularly liked “the stench” description. 🙂
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Cheers, Kassandra. Glad you liked ‘the stench’. Just one of the things that is a shock for Victoria. She has worse to come!! Jx
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Enjoy your stories
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